Reviewed scenario
A traveler at the gate
You want a simple line about a visitor arriving retold in a grand, storybook voice.
BeforeA traveler named Aldric arrived at the gate and asked to see the king.
SafeA traveler named Aldric came to the gate and asked to see the king.
BalancedA wayfarer named Aldric reached the gate and sought audience with the king.
BoldTo the gate came a traveler named Aldric, and he asked to look upon the king.
Reviewed scenario
A council in the hall
You want a plain sentence about a gathering rendered with mythic weight.
BeforeThe council gathered in the hall to celebrate the harvest and thank the 12 guardians.
SafeThe council gathered within the hall to celebrate the harvest and thank the 12 guardians.
BalancedIn the hall the council assembled, to celebrate the harvest and give thanks to the 12 guardians.
BoldWithin the hall the council assembled to hail the harvest and honor the 12 guardians.